ROUND TWO: 11-earmarked vs. 3-trampled

mmpoetry-2015-rd2-logic-11-earmarked-vs-3-trampled



Click here for authlete instructions.

Voter Instructions:

  • The countdown at the bottom of each pairing indicates how much time is left to vote.
    • When voting closes, timer will disappear.
  • Read both poems as many times as you’d like.
  • Mark the poem you like best by clicking the circle next to its name.
  • Press the “Vote” button to record your vote.
  • Votes are counted in real time and cannot be changed once entered.
  • In the Public Vote, anyone may vote, but only one vote is allowed per IP address.
  • In the Classroom Vote, you must be registered and logged in to vote.
    • Official voting classrooms should read and discuss each poem and then submit one vote as a class.
    • Students can then vote again individually from home.
  • In the Authlete Vote, you must be a 2015 authlete and logged in to vote.

Things to Consider in Making a Choice:

  • How well the poem incorporates the authlete’s assigned word, given its level of difficulty.
  • Whether or not the poem adheres to the poem requirements for the contest.
  • Precision: structure, meter, rhyme, syntax, etc.
  • Personality: creative imagery, language, metaphor, etc.
  • Power: makes you laugh, cry, want, sigh, think, dream, wince, scream, etc.
  • Plus One: it is a poem you feel drawn to share with another person for whatever reason.

Apply your own criteria as well! For more on the above concepts, check out POEMETRICS™.


Here are the poems:

age-suggestion-all-ages


11-earmarked what does it mean?
TONIGHT’S ENTRÉE
By Renée M. LaTulippe

A twitch of twisty ears,
the slinky lynx appears—
beyond the shrub he hears
two tasty snowshoe hares … one fatter, one thinner.

His shopping list complete,
he yawns and flexes feet,
anticipates his treat:
two tasty snowshoe hares … now earmarked for dinner.

vs.

age-suggestion-06-plus


3-trampled what does it mean?
Soles of Elephants
By Donna JT Smith

I saved up my allowance – earmarked a bit for me;
The rest would go to elephants – a worthy charity!
I put the money in a box, then mailed it to the zoo.
In days a rumpled card arrived that said, “From Us, To You:
We want to thank you for your help and show you that we care,
So we have sent this note to you and stamped it with such flair!
Our handler said we trampled it – to us it, looked homespun;
We think our lovely footprints solely added to the fun.”

 


Public Vote (11-earmarked vs. 3-trampled)
Final Results:
11-earmarked vs. 3-trampled

Authlete Vote (ID Required)
Final Results:
11-earmarked vs. 3-trampled
Classroom Vote (ID Required)
Final Results:
11-earmarked vs. 3-trampled




Like it? Share it!



Like me? Subscribe to TKT!


  • http://www.mainelywrite.blogspot.com Donna Smith

    Nice one, Renee! Here we go!

  • Renee LaTulippe

    Lynx and elephants – looks like we both went wild this time! :)

    • http://www.mainelywrite.blogspot.com Donna Smith

      And I almost went with rabbits…

  • Buffy Silverman

    Delicious language in Tonight’s Entree–slinky lynx, flexes feet–and terrific use of earmarked. And Donna, I love imagining those homespun notecards with their elephant prints.

    • http://www.mainelywrite.blogspot.com Donna Smith

      Yeah, elephant soles and trampled seem to work together, and I used earmarked, but time restraints thankfully reined me in on trying to link it with elephant ears somehow! Maybe on a later rewrite!

  • http://www.debrashumaker.com/ Debra Shumaker

    Love these!

  • http://www.dianamurray.com/ Diana Murray

    Ooh, Renee! Great wordplay and I LOVE the unique rhyme scheme. Donna, what a fun, kid-friendly concept!

  • Maureen Lynas

    You both created such clear images.Excellently done.

  • Jackie

    Very different forms – it’s the apple and oranges dilemma

  • Damon Dean

    You both have me reading aloud to myself! What fun faunal recitations! So easy to see Renee’s lynx lick his lips and Donna’s trumpers tromp on a thank you note. It WOULD have been so amazing if you had gone with rabbits, Donna. (We would have heard the twilight zone music in the background, I’m sure…)

    • http://www.mainelywrite.blogspot.com Donna Smith

      I know! I’m sure the TZ music would almost have been audible! However I really liked the image of elephants adding their “signatures” with the “soles” of their feet!

  • http://www.mainelywrite.blogspot.com Donna Smith

    That was an amazing ride! Loved every minute and am pleased with the outcome! Best of luck in the next round!

    • Renee LaTulippe

      Great round, Donna! And congrats on the classroom vote – you definitely wrote a kid-pleaser! :)

  • Lori Degman

    Congrats, Renee!!