ROUND FOUR: 13-pedagogues vs. 3-finesse

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Here are the poems:

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13-pedagogues what does it mean?
Stumped
By Randi Sonenshine

Dear Principal Gray, this little request
we hereby most humbly submit:
Please send us a teacher in place of Miss Stump;
she simply is not a good fit.

We’re seeking a teacher who likes to have fun –
We hope you’ll consider our plea:
Sir, please, no more pedagogues, if you don’t mind.
Sincerely, The Kids in 4-B.

Dear students, in light of your recent request
it doesn’t make sense to delay.
I’ll be your new teacher effective next week.
Respectfully, Principal Gray.

Dear Principal Gray, regarding Miss Stump,
our feelings have changed for the better.
We’d therefore be grateful if you would consent
to kindly forget our last letter.

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3-finesse what does it mean?
How to Talk to a Vegetable
By RJ Clarken

If you address the watercress,
use gentle tones and much finesse.

And likewise true for shy Swiss chard:
stay placid and do not bombard.

Now, celery? This point is key:
they are a noisy bunch. Esprit.

Some good advice re artichokes
is tell them puns and knock-knock jokes.

In conversations with the leek,
be careful since they’re quick to pique.

But, artsy rutabaga’s fond
of Klee. Discuss. It will respond.

If you talk football, sporty chives
will cheer and give you huge high fives.

One final note. When with a beet,
watch what you say. They’re indiscreet.

 


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  • Randi

    RJ, this is so clever and musical! Great way to incorporate the word FINESSE. This is good-for-you brilliance!

    • RJ Clarken

      I was about to say the same thing about your letter of pedagoguery! I’m in awe! Definitely a wish-I’d-written-that moment!

      • Randi Sonenshine

        I shared your poem with some middle schoolers today, and they loved it. I had to look up Klee, and the art teacher told me it was pronounced “Clay,” so I had been saying it wrong! Now I want to check out his art, and all because of your poem! :)

        • RJ Clarken

          See? Another nice thing that happened because of this tournament! Thanks for the nice words! :D

  • Renee LaTulippe

    Randi, I like your letter format and the kids’ sudden change of heart. Funny!
    RJ, love the unique topic, so clever and droll. I knew my beets were out to betray me!

    • RJ Clarken

      Yeah, you have to watch out for those beets. They’ll get you every time!

  • http://closejj.wix.com/meretricktheworm Josh Close

    Randi – If only you were given more lines! I loved the idea of this poem, I only wish another stanza or 2 could have been added to provide a picture of why the principal was worse than the teacher. I know it is implied, and the poem itself, as is, is wonderful – not a critique as much as it’s wanting more of the same poem! Clever, humorous!

    RJ – Such an original idea – I don’t think I would have ever come up with this. The rhythm was musical as Randi mentioned – and I think you managed to use 5-6 potential MMPoetry words as well as your assigned, well done!

    • RJ Clarken

      Thank you so much! <3

    • Randi

      Thanks, JJ. I had two more verses I wish I could have included! I tried to do it by making the lines longer, but it just didn’t work as well.

      • http://closejj.wix.com/meretricktheworm Josh Close

        I figured as much – like I said, it’s perfectly fine as is, but those stanzas would be added fun! :)

  • Rebekah Hoeft

    How to choose? So different and I think both of you do a great job incorporating your words seamlessly.
    RJ, I really like that you’re talking to veggies and manage to make it interesting and entertaining!
    Randi, perfect depiction of kids petitioning for what they THINK they want!

    • RJ Clarken

      Thanks!!!

    • Randi

      Thanks, Rebekah!

  • Buffy Silverman

    Wonderful poems! Your letter had me laughing, Randi, and you slipped in pedagogues so naturally. I will never look (or speak to) my vegetables in the same way, RJ–very creative!

    • RJ Clarken

      Thank you so much!

    • Randi

      Thanks, Buffy!

  • Tabatha

    I am really stumped about which poem to vote for — they are both so good!!

    • Randi

      Thanks, Tabatha! Either way, I’m glad you enjoyed reading the poems!

    • RJ Clarken

      Thank you! And like Randi says – either way. Just glad you stopped by and are enjoying the work!

  • deborahhwilliams

    Wow, this was so tough. Both of you can be very proud of your poems!

  • Janie Hogan-Summers Lazo

    Randi- I love the turn in your poem! Well done!!

    • RJ Clarken

      Thank you!

  • Dave Crawley

    Randi, I love the twist at the end. RJ, I think you’ve nailed the temperaments of the vegetables perfectly.

    • Randi Sonenshine

      Thanks, Dave!

    • RJ Clarken

      Thank you! :D

  • rjschechter

    I’m confused why the vote isn’t much closer. To me this is a very close match-up. RJ’s poem sort of reminds me of Paul Simon’s “At the Zoo,” but with vegetables instead of animals.

    • RJ Clarken

      Thanks for the nice words!

  • Heidi Mordhorst

    Both quite impressive–I like all all the missing parts of the first one that demand that the reader fill in. But any poem titled “How to Talk to a Vegetable” leaps ahead, and then to have it end with what I’ve always known about beets–wow!

    • RJ Clarken

      Thank you so much!

  • RJ Clarken

    Congratulations to my very talented and funny opponent! It was a pleasure being with you in the March Madness Poetry 2015! Your poem was all kinds of wonderful! Brava! I expect you to totally bring it in the next round!

    • Randi

      Just saw this, RJ. You echoed my sentiments. It has been an honor and a pleasure to compete alongside you! I look forward to seeing more of your poetry in the near future!

      • RJ Clarken

        Thank you! And big-time ditto!

  • http://www.thinkkidthink.com/ Ed DeCaria

    Great job, Randi^2! You have both written such great poems throughout the event. This one could have gone either way. I suppose we shouldn’t be surprised by the classroom vote, but I’m sure that behind the very lopsided binary result there were lots of individual kids who enjoyed that vegetable poem! Randi S.: Congrats to you on joining this year’s Final Four! For those keeping up with TKT on FB, Randi’s authlete application entry blew me away and was one of those that I posted leading up to the event. I knew you’d make a great authlete …

    • RJ Clarken

      Thank you so much – it’s been a whole lotta fun!

    • Randi

      Thanks, Ed. I am thrilled to have gotten a spot among the 64 and both excited and amazed to be in the Final Four. I appreciate your kind words and the opportunity you have given me and the other authletes to share our life’s passion!

  • Renee LaTulippe

    Congrats, Randi! And to you, too, RJ, for all your great work in the competition!

    • RJ Clarken

      Thanks! And same to you!

  • Janet F.

    This was impossible to choose for me. I loved your poem RJ, I thought your rhymes were spot on! And Randi, being a teacher, I could so relate to your letter-writers. Kids will enjoy both poems. We are lucky to have such terrific poets writing for kids and creating some gems during this tournament! Congratulations to both of you.

    • RJ Clarken

      Thank you so much for your nice words!