ROUND THREE: 14-indefatigable vs. 7-vetted

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Here are the poems:

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14-indefatigable what does it mean?
Shenanigans
By Janie Marie Lazo

I wished for a Brownie- a housekeeping elf.
If only I had one, I thought to myself-
I’d wake to a house that was spotlessly cleaned
By my spritely companion as nightly I dreamed.
But my wish had a glitch – I’m invaded each night,
By an indefatigable army of sprites.
These wee little people keep me awake.
They keep fiddling and dancing- it’s too much to take!
They drink all my root beer- they leave a big mess.
They’re driving me crazy and they couldn’t care less.
They tirelessly hammer away at my shoes.
With all their commotion I can’t ever snooze.
So I painted a rainbow- they like those I’m told.
And I fashioned a leprechaun trap-pot of gold.
Where are they? You ask me- but I’ll never say.
I’ve boxed them and shipped them all far, far away!

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7-vetted what does it mean?
Gold Digger
By Kristen Foote

Drizzle, pour, plop. The rain drips and drops.
A puddle appears on the ground.
At first it looks clear, but when vetted, once near,
a rainbow is what I have found!
I search with a grin, and begin to jump in,
to find me that bucket of gold.
“No, don’t you dare!” my mom scolds with a glare,
“You’ll get wet…. and then, catch a cold!”
So I turn my head slow, and dip in my big toe.
A slimy thing wraps with a bend.
This rainbow’s a lie! There’s no gold, so I cry,
and a worm thinks my toe’s his best friend!

 


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  • Helen Kemp Zax

    So crazy that you both wrote about rainbows and pots of gold!

    • RJ Clarken

      There’s been a lot of poets who are matched up being on the same wavelength. Very cool! And also – I so enjoyed reading both poems!

  • http://closejj.wix.com/meretricktheworm Josh Close

    Janie – I like the lesson in yours that sometimes when you get something you wish for, it may not be all it’s cracked up to be! Great lesson for kids, funny poem!

    Kristen – I like the meter of your poem, it’s very limericky – and that fits well with the theme. Very well written and cute ending!

  • http://laughalotpoetry.com/HOME.html Darren Sardelli

    Interesting – rainbows and gold in both of these poems. I think it’s a nice touch (being that St. Patrick’s Day was this week). I definitely have my favorite, but may the Luck of The Irish be with both of you.

  • Michelle Heidenrich Barnes

    Kind of freaky writing on the same topic, huh.
    Janie- you’ve got me boppin’ right along with those fiddlin’ and dancin’ wee folk. Great rhythm!
    Kristin- love the surprise ending!

  • Buffy Silverman

    Amazing that you both found pots of gold! Love your root beer drinking sprites, Janie. And so funny that your rainbow turned into a worm, Kristen.

  • Rebekah Hoeft

    “I’d wake to a house that was spotlessly cleaned”-fun to say, fun to dream!

    “I search with a grin, and begin to jump in,
    to find me that bucket of gold.” Love this line!

  • http://marlalesage.com Marla Lesage

    I love that you both went with similar themes – Some St Paddy’s inspiration.

  • http://tanitasdavis.com Tee

    Great minds think alike, indeed. What are the chances that you had idea overlap with such vastly differing words!

  • Randi Sonenshine

    Janie, this was a laugh-out-loud poem. I love the whole concept, and especially the last line! Kristen, I love that first line…so musical, and the concept is very cute. I used to look for that pot of gold!

  • lillpluta

    Wow, really tight contest. Congratulations Janie. Well done, Kristen.

  • Janie Hogan-Summers Lazo

    Thanks! This was a fun round. I just figured out how to post comments. Great job Kristen. I loved your poem and so did the kids. I am so excited to be a part of an event that promotes the love of poetry and includes such amazing talent!

  • RJ Clarken

    Congrats to both Janie and Kristen for a brilliant job!

  • Renee LaTulippe

    Congratulations, Janei!

  • Rebekah Hoeft

    Congratulations, Janie!