ROUND TWO: 16-deleterious vs. 9-fathom


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  • How well the poem incorporates the authlete’s assigned word.
  • Technical elements: meter, rhyme, form, shape, and other poetic standards.
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  • Subtle elements that make the whole greater than the sum of its parts.
  • Your overall response: emotional reaction such as admiration, tears, laughter, terror, or some indefinable feeling.

Here are the poems:

16-deleterious
Into The Sea
By William Peery

When the little clam closed on my nose,
I found it quite mysterious.
When the sea turtle latched on my toe,
I thought it was delirious.
When the shark and the eel seized my arms,
I knew they all were serious.
When you toss out your trash in the sea–
the effects are deleterious.

vs.

9-fathom
Fat Tom
By Samuel W. Kent

Fat Tom couldn’t fathom the nickname he bore.
The fact was, he wasn’t that fat anymore
because all last summer, his calories burned
in hopes of a mightier moniker earned.

The flab on his butt and his gut and his face
erased at a near-deleterious pace,
but being “Fat Tom” was his permanent doom
with six other Toms in Miss Henderson’s room.

 




16-deleterious vs. 9-fathom: Which Poem Did You Prefer?

  • 16-deleterious (William Peery) (33%, 71 Votes)
  • 9-fathom (Samuel W. Kent) (67%, 145 Votes)

Total Voters: 216

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  • http://www.quinettecook.com Quinette Cook

    Another sea critter poem. I like the texture of it. Feela like the waves moving in and out. Very sneaky, slipping deleterious in your poem, Samuel. You should get a bonus point for that. It’s so crazy how many similarities there can be in all of these poems. I bet Ed is having a field day.

  • http://www.pennyklostermann.com Penny Klostermann

    Two strong entries in this matchup, too. Yes…sneaky, Samuel! I guess that word is irresistible since it was used several times in this round :-)

  • http://i.droo.it Samuel Kent

    I figured I had two ways to go against a 16 seed opponent; hope he couldn’t pull it off or try to pull it off myself. I didn’t doubt for a second that Mr. Peery could pull it off, so my decision was a bit of a Hobson’s choice.

  • Carrie Finison

    I cannot fathom how these poets keep knocking out these great rhymes in such a short time. Reading these poems is deleterious to my progress in making dinner without burning anything.

  • http://www.NoWaterRiver.com Renee LaTulippe (@ReneeMLaTulippe)

    Ha, funny, Carrie. But true! Well played, gentlemen!

  • http://www.authoramok.com Laura Shovan

    I loved reading some poems with an environmental message in this round. You’re both deleterious dynamos.

  • Bill

    Wow, I’m getting buried alive. Congrats Mr. Kent, and I owe you many thanks for not calling this Fat Bill ;)

    Someone else also used ‘deleterious’. I just happen to be the only one using it not winning.

    I don’t imagine there will be a significant shift in the voting, so good luck to you next round!

    Bill :)

  • http://www.PoemsofJoeMs.com Joe Mohr

    Great poems both of you!!! I love the environmental message of Bill’s, and the humor of Sam’s!

  • http://www.robynhoodblack.com Robyn Hood Black

    Very clever poems. Have to say the layers and fun of “Into the Sea” (even the title), with its rollicking rhythm and reprimanding marine life, pulled me under.

  • http://www.laurasalas.com laurasalas

    Hahahaha! Even though I don’t normally vote for potty humor or easy humor or fat jokes, the cleverness and super meter of Fat Tom got me. I’m sure that was not influenced at all by the fact that I watched The Biggest Loser last night. (Actually, it really wasn’t.) Great job, both of you!

  • http://www.poetrytalents.com Gloson Teh

    Fat Tom… Fathom? I GET IT Samuel! Great poem! :D

    By the way, William, I love the “erious” rhyme in your poem too! It’s one of the best rhymes ever.

  • http://catherinemjohnson.wordpress.com Catherine Johnson

    Well done both of you! Such great rhyming poems and so fun too.

  • http://www.AprilWayland.comalsowww.TeachingAuthors.com April Halprin Wayland

    Wow. This is a tough decision,loved them both, gentlemen! For me it came down to being a little uncomfortable referring to fat–I’ve been there.

  • http://i.droo.it Samuel Kent

    Sadly, So have I…

  • http://i.droo.it Samuel Kent

    I’m so glad you got this. not even my mom noticed Until You Said something

  • http://sevenacresky.wordpress.com Damon Dean

    Excellent use of your words, and both fun fun poems.
    Fat Tom’s dilemma is familiar since I’ve had classrooms with multiple names in them in my teaching past.

  • http://i.droo.it Samuel Kent

    Bill, it’s been a pleasure competing with you, and I’m grateful for this opportunity.

  • bill

    Thanks, good luck to you. Now I can kick back and enjoy the tournament:)