ROUND THREE: 16-eviscerate vs. 5-suited

r3 16-eviscerate vs. 5-suited

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  • The countdown at the bottom of each pairing indicates how much time is left to vote.
    • When voting closes, timer will disappear.
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    • Students can then vote again individually from home.

Things to Consider in Making a Choice:

  • How well the poem incorporates the authlete’s assigned word.
  • Technical elements: meter, rhyme, form, shape, and other poetic standards.
  • Creativity: wordplay, imagery, unusual approach, etc.
  • Subtle elements that make the whole greater than the sum of its parts.
  • Your overall response: emotional reaction such as admiration, tears, laughter, terror, or some indefinable feeling.

Here are the poems:

16-eviscerate
Homework Blues
by Margo Lemieux

This writing assignment’s assigned out of spit
I’ll only complete it by working all nit
To eviscerate words with a pen not a sword
Is a miserable problem allrit.

Miriam Webster gives support so fin
I’d really do well if I only had tim
To insinuate spaces can function as specious
A legitimate challenge sublim

I can just justify jilting an E
And then to eliminate H and a G.
To exterminate letters might really be better
Than getting an F, you’ll agree.

vs.

5-suited
Snow Day Fun
by Jean Daigneau

I’m playing with my sisters since
We have a day off school.
We’re thrilled. It’s snow day number nine!
This winter’s been so cool.

Celeste and June are trying to
Out-yodel one another;
And Tess is playing bagpipes while
She’s skyping with our brother.

Susannah’s got her ipod cranked.
Lane’s watching the T.V.
I’m talking on Mom’s cell phone while
I’m bowling on the Wii.

Mom says she’s better suited for
A life of peace and quiet
And if we had a volume knob
She’d be the first to try it!

 


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  • Ryan Stockton

    Ugh. I don’t want either of you to lose this round. Well played the pair of you!

  • Jackie Wellington

    This was awesome. I love the flow of suited. I can relate to all those things. Thanks both of you for writing great poetry.

  • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

    These are both super fun. I love Margo’s wit and I was transported to a snow day in Jean’s. Excellent work ladies!!!

  • Quinette Cook

    Margo, your poem caut me off guard and then made me smil. How clever.
    Jean, if I had that many kids in my house I’d lock myself in the bathroom…
    Great job ladies.

    • Bonnie Bailey

      Yeah really! That poor mother! I’d like an OFF button, not just a volume knob :)

  • Bonnie Bailey

    Very clever Margo! Had to read that one twice!

  • Michele Krueger

    Both poems so well crafted! Bravo ladies!

  • Darren Sardelli

    Margo – I love the twist you put on this poem. Extremely clever!!!
    Jean – Nine snow days!!! That’s every kid’s dream!!!

  • Debra Shumaker

    These are great. My kids have had 14 snow days so far this winter, thankfully I only have three. ..

  • Margo

    Thanks, Everyone! I didn’t know what I was getting into. I feel like I am competing with my pals. I would like us ALL to win.

  • Jean Daigneau

    I agree with Margo. But, I feel that if I don’t make the next round or the next, I’ve certainly competed with some incredibly creative people and that’s been fun and a real honor! I love reading everyone’s work.

  • Elizabeth McBride

    Fantastic work! Love the creativity of the ideas and their fruition! Great, great job!

  • Buffy Silverman

    Love the way you eviscerated those words, Margo–so clever! And Jean, I think there are many moms that can relate to the mom in your poem this winter.

  • http://www.glosonblog.com Gloson

    Great, great poems Margo and Jean! You both never fail to deliver.
    (Margo, I noticed you used my word “spite” without really using it. hahahaha.)

    • Margo

      Tanks!

  • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

    Wow!!! The public vote was a misdirect!! Congratulations Jean!!!! Margo, your poem was awesome! Sincerely!

  • Margo

    Congratulations, Jean! Well done!

  • Jean Daigneau

    Margo,
    Thanks! I love the creativity you’re shown. Great job, too.

  • http://www.glosonblog.com Gloson

    An Ode To Public Vote

    Oh Public Vote,
    your statistics
    do seem to misdirect.
    You give us some surprises
    because you’re not correct.
    You make us poets crack our heads
    in trying to deduce
    why Authlete Vote
    and Classroom Vote
    chooses what they choose.

    • http://www.thinkkidthink.com/ Ed DeCaria

      Love it.

  • Ldegman

    Congrats, Jean – good luck in the next round!

  • Damon Dean

    Margo, loved how you took your poem to the cutting board! Clever and fun!
    Jean, your snow day was marvelous. Congratulations on moving on!

  • Margo

    Thanks, especially to Ed for having me here. I look forward to the rest of MM.