ROUND TWO: 16-fabricating vs. 8-forego

r2f2 16-fabricating vs. 8-forego

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Here are the poems:

16-fabricating
The Homework Machine
by Miranda Paul

Last month’s report card made Mother unhappy,
and flipped Father’s mood from sunny to snappy.
So here’s my new plan—it’s done calibrating—
The H-BOT 2000® is now fabricating
all of my homework. Hip, Hip, Hooray!
Watch as Miss Margins gives me an A…
What’s this?
Red marks?
All over my work?
As it turns out, The H-BOT’s a jerk.

vs.

8-forego
You Can Do It
by Michele Krueger

abandon their decision to believe that you can’t do it
forego their opinion that you should not make it through

eschew their conclusion that you just weren’t meant to
refute their suggestion that you haven’t got a clue

embrace your intention
to finish what you’ve started

your future is unlimited
your destiny, uncharted

 


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  • Quinette Cook

    Nothing like fabrication to get you into hot water with your teacher, Miranda!
    And Michele, what a positive message in your poem! Great job, ladies.

  • Bonnie Bailey

    Hahaha, that mean H-BOT 2000! Nice wit Miranda :) Michele, motivating, and a very necessary message for kids! Good job, both of you!

  • Samuel Kent

    Miranda, I love this. I laughed loudly enough to scare off my cat. Michel: this is wonderful. I applaud your use of vocabulary and the tone reminded me of Shel Silverstein’s “Listen to the Mustn’ts”

  • Debra Shumaker

    I love them both so much, I just can’t decide. Well done, ladies!

  • Miranda Paul

    Great job Michele! Thanks everyone for the comments. :)

  • BJ Lee

    Michelle – love your positive message! and Miranda – so funny!

  • Elizabeth McBride

    Miranda, you’re dashing every kid’s hope for the elusive Homework Machine! So funny! And Michele, what a great message to readers!

  • Buffy Silverman

    Great poems, ladies–Miranda, what kid wouldn’t want your H-Bot (until those red marks show up)? And Michele, loved the positive message here.

  • Michele Krueger

    Thanks, all, for your kind comments. Good job, Miranda.

  • Damon Dean

    Michele, I love that cheering encouragement! Brings expectation back to the heart where it belongs! Great poem.
    Miranda, your H-BOT is the epitome of school-kid creativity…and so I would be tempted to give the kid an “A” for that.

  • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

    Congrats Miranda! Really enjoyed both of these poems.