ROUND ONE: 3-avid vs. 14-concurrent

r1f1 3-avid vs 14-concurrent

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Things to Consider in Making a Choice:

  • How well the poem incorporates the authlete’s assigned word.
  • Technical elements: meter, rhyme, form, shape, and other poetic standards.
  • Creativity: wordplay, imagery, unusual approach, etc.
  • Subtle elements that make the whole greater than the sum of its parts.
  • Your overall response: emotional reaction such as admiration, tears, laughter, terror, or some indefinable feeling.

Here are the poems:

3-avid
Thief
by Kyle Hart

My little brother Mark has been avid for weeks.
He brings this up every time that he speaks.

He’ll look in my eyes while he angrily squawks,
“Something or someone’s been stealing my socks!”

“You’re fibbing,” I tell him. “Get out of my room!”
And I slammed my door with a thunderous boom.

Well… last night at 10, Mark proved me the liar.
When he showed me a squid living inside our dryer.

vs.

14-concurrent
Train Wreck
by Vikram Madan

My poem wasn’t very tight – a word slipped out and fell
It landed on the line below and ruptured that as well
What opus could withstand the weight of words with such impact?
My rhymes were shaky from the start, but now my structure cracked!
The meter flailed, the rhythm quailed, the syllables played dead
Concurrent with this brouhaha, the verses cursed and fled
More lines caved in…! More words fell through…! The end is nigh, I guess :(
I hope you’ll still make some sense of this train wreck of a mess.

My poem wasn’t very tight – a word slipped out and fell
It landed on the line below and ruptured that as well
What opus could withstand the weight of words with such impact?
My rhymes were shaky from the start, but now my structure cracked!
The meter flailed, the rhythm quailed, the syllables played dead
Concurrent with this brouhaha, the verses cursed and fled
More lines caved in…! More words fell through…! The end is nigh, I guess
I hope you’ll still make some sense of this train wreck of a mess.

 


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  • Damon Dean

    That’s such a creative wreck Vikram! And Kyle…I’m grabbing a big fork and tiptoeing cautiously up to my dryer. This will be a difficult vote for me.

  • http://teacherdance.blogspot.com Linda Baie

    Complex mystery and complex structure-such fun to read and to see!

  • http://www.glosonblog.com Gloson

    Amazing poem, Vikram! You made it easy to understand even without reading the fallen words! And Kyle, loved the “thunderous boom”. That is one mischievous squid.

  • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

    WHAT!!! Vikram, that’s crazy. That’s like ninja poetry skills. But Kyle has some talented rhymes there. We shall see who wins this one…They are both so good!

    • Vikram Madan

      Actually I don’t see myself as a poetry ninja at all – more like the Inspector Closeau of poetry :) but thanks for the compliment :)

  • Vikram Madan

    As every poet knows, sometimes poems just have a tendency to, uhm, fall apart on you…

  • Renee LaTulippe

    Hey, I know that squid! Funny, Kyle! Vikram, Vikram, Vikram….you had me at “The meter flailed, the rhythm quailed, the [syllables] played dead” and sealed the deal at “Concurrent with this brouhaha, the verses cursed and fled.” HA! So clever in form and concept. :)

    • Vikram Madan

      Glad you liked it Renee. For the record I still have your line “What manifestation of happy is this?” stuck in my head from last years contest. We’re missing you in this tournament …

  • Debbie B. LaCroix

    That is the most original format I’ve ever seen! Wow! It worked so well. A++
    And loved the twist in the dryer…. both such fun and original poems!

  • Miranda Paul

    Wow.

  • Quinette Cook

    Oh, man. I am a sucker for visual poems and this was a great one. You can tell Vikram is an artist. It’s hardly fair to Kyle who has such a fun, rhyming poem (with a funny twist). Well done poets.

    • Vikram Madan

      Ed, the gatekeeper, wouldn’t let the artist in me sneak in an image so I had to go for the next best possibility. Many, many thanks to Ed for putting in the extra effort to get my formatting across. Thanks Ed! :)

      • Quinette Cook

        Ed did the same for me for a poem I did the first year of the competition (thank you, Ed).
        I love concrete poetry, but it would be very difficult to do in this competition. Good luck, Vikram!

  • Catherine

    A fun one and a clever one. This was tough

  • Buffy Silverman

    Oh that train wreck–both words and structure are amazing! And your squidly thief made me laugh, Kyle.

  • http://alwayslookingup.co/ Kyle Hart

    Fantastic and highly original poem, Vikram. I can honestly say I’ve never seen anything done like that before. My hat’s off to you and it’s an honor competing against such talent.

    • Vikram Madan

      Thanks for the kind words Kyle – I love the imagery that comes across in your poem so really the honor is all mine. :)

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      This was a really good match up…both super talented!

  • Dave Crawley

    Vikram offers up the perfect vision of a train wreck, while Kyle offers a new twist on calamari…

  • Kathy Ellen Davis

    Great structure in the train wreck, and a squid in a dryer is very inventive! Great poems!

  • Ldegman

    Very clever formatting, Vikram!!

  • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

    Congrats Vikram! Kyle, amazing poem…really top notch.

  • Quinette Cook

    Ed, I’m noticing some of the public vote final scores are not showing. Is this my computer or it’s not updated?

    • Vikram Madan

      This is not just you – I think if you voted in the public vote before the polls closed, then you get to see the results. If you didn’t vote in the public vote then the public vote results are not being displayed to you. Probably something Ed needs to tweak on the website itself…