ROUND FOUR: 4-paunch vs. 14-philanthropic

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4-paunch what does it mean?
How to Eat a Frog: A Snake’s Manual
By Buffy Silverman

Flick your tongue and taste the smells
of mucky snails and crayfish shells.
Weave your way through marshy grass,
past the lodge where Muskrat dwells.
Blink your eyelids. Slide, explore…
Slow and stealthy… wait to score.
Watch each ripple in the pond,
glide along the swampy shore.
Lunge and grab! Your mouth’s agape,
an endless cave with no escape.
Inhale the head. Legs dangle out–
Muscle down that froggy shape.
Feel the bulging deep within,
a swollen paunch that stretches skin.
Enjoy your meal, your lump of blisssssss,
guaranteed to make you grin.

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14-philanthropic what does it mean?
Mis- Givings
By Janie Marie Lazo

Robin and his Merry Men had philanthropic flair.
Fearlessly they lived a life most people wouldn’t dare.
To some they were brave rebels- to others, common thieves.
Sherwood Forest keeps such secrets in her hushed and listening leaves.
Now Robin loved a maiden who was captive to the King.
Maid Marian soon was Robin’s spy- what daring, love does bring!
Little John, an expert marksman- with his bow could save the day.
Will Scarlett with two swinging swords would keep the guards at bay.
This fearsome band of brothers, aided by a maiden fair,
Planned a heist within the castle and the plunder they would share.
So they robbed the King and took the loot and gave some to the poor.
But not purely philanthropic, to themselves they did give more!
They were righting some injustice- such a noble thing to do.
But true charity means giving when the gift is not for you.
And doing good for others should be innocent and fun,
And it shouldn’t lead to jail time when your do-good deed is done!

 


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  • RJ Clarken

    Janie – I love your Robin Hood take! Buffy – Ribbit! What clever, interesting and fun poems!

    • Buffy Silverman

      Thanks, RJ!

    • Janie Hogan-Summers Lazo

      Thanks RJ! I love Robin Hood and couldn’t resist.

  • http://closejj.wix.com/meretricktheworm Josh Close

    Buffy – You’re always so creative with animal poems, I really like animal POV poems – actually had one written for my hierarchy word, but elected not to use it! Just an idea, but I think it might be cool to stretch out all of the S sounds in your poem like you did at the end – just to get the reader to read it with a lisp like a snake! Might be too distracting, but I re-read it in a snake voice and it actually sounded pretty cool!

    Janie – I’m impressed that you managed to tell the tale of Robin Hood in so few lines, wonderful message weaved in as well – I think that’s how we all feel about the tale of Robin Hood. :)

    • Buffy Silverman

      Thanksssss, Josh. I did play with more ssss-es but decided it looked strange–but will think about it again when I revise this. You’re right that kids would enjoy reading in a snaky voice.

    • Janie Hogan-Summers Lazo

      Thanks Josh!

  • Renee LaTulippe

    Nice job on the Robin Hood replay, Janie!

    Buffy, I love your sneaky snake manual. So creative and lyrical, but still sufficiently yucky! :) Mmmm…think I’ll go fix a lump of blisssssss for dinner…

    • Buffy Silverman

      Thanks, Renee. Enjoy your dinner!

  • Randi

    Bufffy, I love how you always incorporate science-y stuff into your poetry, in a way that is accessible to kids and fun to boot! The lyrical language and hissy alliteration fit the topic perfectly! Bravo!

    • Buffy Silverman

      Thank you Randi!

  • Randi

    Janie, I am a sucker for anything Robin Hood. I love how you incorporated not only the word, but also applied the concept of philanthropy in your rollicking poem. Way to go!

    • Janie Hogan-Summers Lazo

      Thank you Randi!

  • Rebekah Hoeft

    Buffy, I like your poem very much–who knew I could enjoy reading about a snake ingesting a frog!
    Janie–My kids and I have talked about the moral conundrum in Robin Hood–I like that your poem points that out! Well done!

    • Buffy Silverman

      Thanks Rebekah!

  • Buffy Silverman

    Love the kid-friendly way you used philanthropic, Janie–and that you showed both sides to Robin Hood’s philanthropy. Fun language and bouncy rhythm too!

    • Janie Hogan-Summers Lazo

      Thanks Buffy! I appreciate your kind words:)

  • Janie Hogan-Summers Lazo

    Buffy- The imagery in your poem is flawless. You took me to the swamp and mesmerized me with turn away in horror appeal!

  • http://www.thinkkidthink.com/ Ed DeCaria

    Great job by both authletes with these creative entries! Janie — you’ve been such a terrific authlete. Thank you for contributing so many great poems to the event. And Buffy — another winner! CONGRATS on making this year’s Final Four!!!

    • RJ Clarken

      Excellent poeming – both Buffy and Janie! You guys did the competition proud! And congrats to Buffy!

    • Janie Hogan-Summers Lazo

      Thank you so much Ed! I have thoroughly enjoyed being part of this event. Thanks for the opportunity! I can’t wait to read and vote for the next 2 rounds. I am looking for a volunteer to randomly send me words every few days so I can continue to write( since this seemed to be the motivation I needed to dust off my pen and paper). Congratulations Buffy – I knew you had this the second I read your poem. Fantastic job and good luck in the next round!

      • Buffy Silverman

        Thanks, Janie. It was wonderful to get to know you and your poetry–you wrote some terrific poems!

        • Janie Hogan-Summers Lazo

          Thank you Buffy! Hope to make the cut next year and try again!

  • http://www.thinkkidthink.com/ Ed DeCaria

    So here I am a half hour later complimenting Renee on her achievement tying Samuel Kent for the most wins in #MMPoetry history only to go back and look at the records to find that Buffy is right up there with them both. All three of them have 9 tournament wins. Both Renee and Buffy now have a chance to make it 10. And guess what? They face each other in the Final Four, which means ONE of them (and only one) is going to do it! Gonna be fun to watch!

  • Renee LaTulippe

    WHOO-HOO, BUFFY! Congratulations, my friend! I’m not looking forward to facing off with you, but if the next round is my last, I will leave happy knowing I lost to such a fabulous poet!

  • Rebekah Hoeft

    Way to go, Buffy! I can’t wait to read your next poem!
    Janie, well done! A lot of classrooms loved your take on Robin Hood!

  • Janet F.

    Congratulations, Buffy! Your poem is terrific and I can’t wait to share that “blisssss” with my students when I get back into school!! Janie, kids will enjoy your tale of the Merry Men and their un-philanthropic deed! ANd thanks, again, Ed, for a great and entertaining month of new poetry. I am continually amazed (but should not be) by the efforts and results from these Authletes. Happy to be “meeting” new ones, too!!