ROUND TWO: 7-hiatus vs. 15-mellifluous

r2f1 7-hiatus vs. 15-mellifluous

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  • How well the poem incorporates the authlete’s assigned word.
  • Technical elements: meter, rhyme, form, shape, and other poetic standards.
  • Creativity: wordplay, imagery, unusual approach, etc.
  • Subtle elements that make the whole greater than the sum of its parts.
  • Your overall response: emotional reaction such as admiration, tears, laughter, terror, or some indefinable feeling.

Here are the poems:

7-hiatus
On Hiatus
by Kathy Ellen Davis

I learned that hiatus means break,
and put that to use right away.

I posted a sign:
“On hiatus from chores”
and instead went outside to play.

I wondered what Dad made for lunch;
on the table,
I found this clue:

“Happy Hiatus!
and if you’re on hiatus,
then I’m on hiatus too.”

vs.

15-mellifluous
Mellifluous
by Karyn Linnell

A poor, clumsy girl named Mellifluous, whose voice sounded like an old goat,
Embarked on a quest to find magical bees, whose honey could transform her throat

She stumbled and fumbled for miles, until she tripped and took a dive
And when poor Mellifluous landed, her head was stuck in the bees’ hive

Those bees were quite mad at Mellifluous, and oh how that poor girl got stung!
But each OW! she yelled was like music! The honey had sweetened her tongue!

Despite all her welts, Mellifluous sang; this golden voice was now her own.
And to this day a mellifluous sound is one with a smooth and sweet tone.

 


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  • Kathy Ellen Davis

    Great poem, Karyn! I love how both of us defined the word in our poem! For kids it’s a good thing; they read it, and now they know the word!

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      AND we both used our words five times!!! I think that might be some sort of record. I love the elegance you write with…you fit so much meaning into such a small space. If you look at my poetry blog, most of my poems are are an average of about eight stanzas with four lines per stanza. Limiting myself to 8 lines is cruelty for me. I feel like I’m trying to pack just a carry-on for a two-week trip.

  • Damon Dean

    Wow Karyn! Having goats, I know exactly how Mellifluous sounded…now I want to feed my goats some honey and see what happens.
    Kathy, you made a Dad smile here! Hilarious and above all, just good parenting! Loved it.
    Tough tough vote.

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      My parents had a few pygmy goats. Super cute! The word mellifluous comes from Latin mel (honey) + fluere (to flow) so that’s where the whole honey idea originated from.

    • Kathy Ellen Davis

      I feel like I would be that kid.
      And in the future, I’ll probably be that parent too :)

  • Bonnie Bailey

    You both did beautifully. This is getting tough…

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      Thanks!

  • Buffy Silverman

    Dad’s hiatus made me laugh, Kathy. And great transformation for Mellifluous, Karyn.

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      Thanks! :)

    • Kathy Ellen Davis

      Parents need hiatuses too (Or hiati?) :)

  • Debra Shumaker

    Quite the competition brewing in round two. Such hard decisions!

    • Quinette Cook

      I agree!

  • Elizabeth McBride

    Super job, both of you! What a great, memorable, and enjoyable way for kids to expand their vocabulary.

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      Thank you so much for the encouragement!

    • Kathy Ellen Davis

      Thanks! I think vocab lessons should feature a poem about each word! Then they’d have a story to go along with their new word, and may remember it more!

      • Elizabeth McBride

        I agree! We’re all in such a rush these days that such important reinforcing practices get skipped.

  • Quinette Cook

    And the competition heats up. I’m going for a cup of tea (with honey). My voice is going baaaaad on me from all this cheering.

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      Ha ha! Insert rimshot!

    • Damon Dean

      Q, that’s funny!

  • julie krantz

    Tough choice, folks!

  • Samuel Kent

    Good round, you two. Karyn, I thought you were pulling a MadLibs style cheat with your word, but I’m glad that you delivered the real goods in such a way at the end. Kathy, yours elicited an audible laugh from me.

    • Kathy Ellen Davis

      YES! I love when people literally laugh out loud :)

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      I actually did write a cheating mellifluous poem…but opted not to use it. :)

  • Kathy Ellen Davis

    Wow! Down to the wire with one classroom vote! What a close match! Good luck in the next round, Karyn! I had fun competing against you!

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      No kidding!!! Considering your poem, I’m not surprised it was that close. It was really great, so much so that I felt a little surprised I won, but super honored. Thank you for competing with me. I am a fan of your work because of this competition. I will see you around the internet!

  • Ldegman

    Another close one! Congrats, Karyn – good luck in round 3!

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      Thank you!

  • Damon Dean

    Karyn, close and congrats! GREAT poem, and Kathy, loved your dad-child hiatus. Great round from two great poets worth following!

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      Thanks!