ROUND ONE: 7-juts vs. 10-shindig

r1f1 7-juts vs 10-shindig

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Here are the poems:

7-juts
This Moment
by Stephen W Cahill

The mind – it juts out to the future.
The mind – it sinks in to before.
It misses the present – the beauty.
The truth – that unveils so much more.

So sprinkle your senses with now.
Soak in the birds and the bees.
Savour aromas and spices.
Stretch for the stars and be free.

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10-shindig
A Shindig in the Sand
by Kristen Foote

On beach vacations don’t ignore the sea-side celebrations!
A sand-crab shindig on the shore – two decapod crustaceans.
They appetize on algae and delight in fish-filet,
they sweep their feast straight from the sea – a plankton-packed buffet.
The cawing seagulls form the band and croon while they fandango.
Swoon two-by-two, in shifting sand, an intertidal tango.
As sunset fades, they part their ways. Their love affair suggests,
they’ll meet again in thirty days with 40,000 guests.

 


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  • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

    So much cleverness!!! Great job you guys!!

  • Renee LaTulippe

    Thoughtful advice vs. an ocean hoedown! I like your message, Stephen, but that plankton-packed buffet is calling my name! :)

  • Miranda Paul

    That’s a tough vote to make, because they’re both so different! Each one used the word in a way I wouldn’t have expected. Good job, guys.

    • Ldegman

      You took the words right out of my mouth! It was a tough one!

  • Quinette Cook

    Both poems ask us to take time to observe and be present in the moment. Always a good thing to do. And something these poets seem to do well.

  • Ryan Stockton

    Man this one was tough. Great job the pair of you!

  • Catherine

    Such different poems and both wonderful!

  • Buffy Silverman

    What a decapod delight–love this intertidal tango! And love your message of being present Stephen, to notice all those delights.

  • http://www.mainelywrite.blogspot.com Donna Smith

    Mmmm. Really enjoyed both.

  • Allan Wolf

    Dang. This one’ll be a crowd-pleasing squeaker for sure!

  • Kristen Foote

    Great job Stephen!! I was wondering what you would do with that word! :)

    • Stephen Cahill

      Likewise Kristen. I sure dug your shindig! Lovely work :-)

  • http://www.glosonblog.com Gloson

    Has anyone noticed that both poems incorporated ahem ahem THE BIRDS AND THE BEES? ahem ahem

  • Debbie B. LaCroix

    Kristen–love the non-fiction touch. And thanks for the reminder Stephen! :-)

  • http://julierowanzoch.wordpress.com/ Julie Rowan-Zoch

    Terrible to have two critique partners up against each other! (Nice beard though, Stephen!)

  • Darren Sardelli

    Kristen – love your rhythm and meter. Job well done!!!

  • Damon Dean

    Kristen, just got back from a brief beach moment…too brief to catch the shindig. Beautiful imagery. And Stephen, you have accosted me for missing that moment, and probably more, in all their glory. Great poems.

  • Kathy Ellen Davis

    Love the message of being present,
    And the ocean party!
    Great job both of you :)

  • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

    Congratulations Kristen!! Great job Stephen!

    • Kristen Foote

      Thank you!!! It’s a tough competition out there!