ROUND ONE: 7-snippet vs. 10-perpetual

r1f1 7-snippet vs 10-perpetual YOU

ATTENTION READERS: One of the authletes originally slated for this matchup — Tiffany Strelitz Haber — is no longer able to participate. We’ll miss her always-humorous verse this year, but the show must go on! So let’s have some fun. YOU are officially invited to submit your own poem using the 10-seed word “perpetual” in the comments section below. Everyone can also use the little “up arrow” next to each comment-poem to show that you like the poem. The comment-poem with the most “up votes” at the time the poll expires will be pasted in the main body of this post for our perpetual collective enjoyment. The Public Vote will feature Kathy Ellen vs. Everyone Else! The Authlete Vote and the Classroom Vote will automatically be decided in Kathy Ellen’s favor.

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Voter Instructions:

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    • Classrooms should submit one vote as a class.
    • Students can then vote again individually from home.

Things to Consider in Making a Choice:

  • How well the poem incorporates the authlete’s assigned word.
  • Technical elements: meter, rhyme, form, shape, and other poetic standards.
  • Creativity: wordplay, imagery, unusual approach, etc.
  • Subtle elements that make the whole greater than the sum of its parts.
  • Your overall response: emotional reaction such as admiration, tears, laughter, terror, or some indefinable feeling.

Here are the poems:

7-snippet
The haircut
by Kathy Ellen Davis

When I saw the scissors,
I shuddered.

“Now it won’t hurt a bit!”
said my Dad.

I shut my eyes tight;
I tried to be brave.

But this whole thing
was making me sad.

Whoosh whoosh,
the snippets
were falling!

But why
was it taking
so long?

I opened my eyes
and let out a CRY!

All my Dad’s
long hair
was GONE!

vs.

10-perpetual
???
by ???

And the winner of the “Everyone Else” poem contest in the comments section is …

10-perpetual
A Landlubber’s Tale
by Renée LaTulippe

Young Pirate Paul couldn’t take any more
of the waves and the ocean’s perpetual roar —
and the fact that his chores were a bone-crushing bore
did nothing to raise his morale.

He dreamed of the day he’d debark on the shore,
find a house where he’d keep his feet fast on the floor…
but one day while swabbing, he tripped on an oar,
now he’s bobbing off Guadalcanal.

 


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7-snippet vs. 10-perpetual

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  • http://www.glosonblog.com Gloson

    hmmm… what if “everyone else” wins? :P

  • http://www.glosonblog.com Gloson

    And Kathy, loved the line breaks in your poem. It certainly had one unexpected and enjoyable twist.

    • Kathy Ellen Davis

      Thanks, Gloson. I love weird line breaks :)

  • http://www.glosonblog.com Gloson

    Noooo Tiffany…. will certainly miss your rhymes.
    hmmm… what if “everyone else” wins?

    • http://www.thinkkidthink.com/ Ed DeCaria

      Everyone Else can at best win the Public Vote — which in this case will be purely for fun. Kathy Ellen automatically wins the Authlete Vote and the Classroom Vote, and will move on to Round Two.

      • http://www.dianamurray.com/ Diana Murray

        Is there a deadline, Ed?

  • deborahhwilliams

    Washday Prayer
    Our Lady of Perpetual Laundry,
    Keep crayons far from my dryer.
    My washer has issues,
    Protect it from tissues,
    And don’t let my lint trap catch fire.

    • Catherine

      Fun one, Deborah!

    • http://www.dianamurray.com/ Diana Murray

      Ha ha! Good one. Very creative use of the word.

    • http://teacherdance.blogspot.com Linda Baie

      Terrific Deb-should be posted in the laundry room!

    • MegMillerWrites

      ha! :D Love it Deb.

    • Elizabeth McBride

      Awesome poem, Deborah!

  • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

    I’m sorry to hear about Ms. Haber, but Kathy Ellen, I am definitely not voting for you by default. I definitely meant my vote!!!

    • Kathy Ellen Davis

      Thanks :)

  • Renee LaTulippe

    A Landlubber’s Tale

    Young Pirate Paul couldn’t take any more
    of the waves and the ocean’s perpetual roar —
    and the fact that his chores were a bone-crushing bore
    did nothing to raise his morale.

    He dreamed of the day he’d debark on the shore,
    find a house where he’d keep his feet fast on the floor…
    but one day while swabbing, he tripped on an oar,
    now he’s bobbing off Guadalcanal.

    • disqus_xkUvROpuwp

      LOVE it, Renee! I’m so glad you got to participate (even if it’s just for this!) :)

      • Renee LaTulippe

        HA! I know – I’m so glad I got to sneak in just for a little bit!

        • http://www.thinkkidthink.com/ Ed DeCaria

          This was all an elaborate ruse to entice Renee to participate. Tiffany, you can climb out of bed now!

          • Renee LaTulippe

            Your dastardly plan worked…THIS time… :)

            • http://www.thinkkidthink.com/ Ed DeCaria

              Someone please try to get Ewert, Ode, Slesarik, Wayland, Salas, VanDerwater, and Pincus to all write poems, too.

            • Quinette Cook

              I’ll see if I can cajole Salas.

          • http://www.itsrhymetime.com Tiffany Strelitz Haber

            I just sent mine in. Not only am I not sick anymore, but my computer suddenly works again! A bloody miracle! So bummed I didn’t just send it in when it was due though. My brain just wasn’t working correctly. :-(

            • Rebekah Hoeft

              Tiffany–That stinks! Glad you’re feeling better!

    • Matt Forrest

      Love it!

    • Catherine

      Good one, Renee!

    • http://julierowanzoch.wordpress.com/ Julie Rowan-Zoch

      LOVE! This is not only perfect, Renee, but so timely for me! Been watching seamen movies all week: Horatio Hornblower, Master and Commander, and The Ghost and Mrs. Muir!

    • http://www.dianamurray.com/ Diana Murray

      Love it, Renee! I always love your poems. Wonderful job with the challenging rhyme scheme, too.

    • http://teacherdance.blogspot.com Linda Baie

      Alas Pirate Paul, he lost it all, and now lives in perpetuity.
      He deserves a prayer, a hero who dared to make his escape with impunity.
      Great story/poem Renee!

      • Renee LaTulippe

        Ha! Pirate Paul appreciates this fine epilogue, Linda!

        • http://teacherdance.blogspot.com Linda Baie

          Inspiration comes in strange packages! You’re welcome!

    • Quinette Cook

      Nice.

    • BJ Lee

      Nice Renee!
      Glad you got
      to come out and play!
      love the word ‘debark’

    • BJ Lee

      Nice Renee
      Glad you got
      to come out and play!
      Love the word ‘debark’

    • Elizabeth McBride

      Wow, Renee! Great poem – I loved the opening “ocean’s perpetual roar”

  • Quinette Cook

    Sorry to hear that Tiffany won’t be with us – we’ll miss her. Congrats Kathy, love the unexpected ending.

  • Quinette Cook

    Can’t resist adding a poem.

    All Wet

    There’s a perpetual
    drip,
    drip,
    drip.
    From the faucet it’s growing
    now the sink’s overflowing
    on the floor it is going.
    Look out! Don’t
    slip.

  • Jeanne Poland

    Perpetual Pearls

    Pearls are perpetual –
    morphing
    marooned –
    cocooned
    in a bed
    by clown-clams –
    buffoons!

    • Catherine

      Great choice of words, Jeanne. Very nice!

      • Jeanne Poland

        Hi mate! Still voting for me, even here.
        Jeanne

        • Catherine

          :0)

    • Quinette Cook

      Love the sea-like rhythm of this poem.

      • Jeanne Poland

        When I Was a child we went clamming, and brought them home in our bathing suits.

        • Quinette Cook

          Too funny. And I bet a bit scratchy.

  • http://www.dianamurray.com/ Diana Murray

    Kathy, what a fun poem!

    Here’s my shot at the “perpetual” poem.

    KARMA

    You steal a baseball card from Mike,
    then speed away, and crash your bike.
    You call your teammate, Phil, a name,
    then miss the shot and lose the game.
    But when you share your snack with Mack
    you get your karma back on track.
    It’s what-you-give-you-get-ual.
    The tally is perpetual.

    (At least that’s what some people swear.
    But sometimes life just isn’t fair.
    And sometimes jerks get all the perks,
    and it’s not clear if karma works.)

    • Quinette Cook

      This is great! Karma, so true.

  • http://www.itsrhymetime.com Tiffany Strelitz Haber

    Did mine show up anywhere? I swear I posted it, but can’t find it.

  • http://www.itsrhymetime.com Tiffany Strelitz Haber

    Ok, 2nd attempt at posting my original poem:

    I was so sick in bed, that I never even sent my poem in. It was ready on time, but I was just too under the weather….and I felt I didn’t give it the attention it deserved, so I was embarrassed to post it for the world to see. Now that I am better, I am SO BUMMED I never sent it, because i wait for this competition al year, and at least I could have been “in it”, even if I didn’t win. :-( But now that we are opening up the floodgates- here goes:

    The Unfortuate Victory

    Addison wanted to break a world record.
    Anything, really, would do.

    He tried everything: jumping jacks, weaving string,
    even playing the didgeridoo.

    Then one day he got one he didn’t much want,
    as he swallowed a huge bite of food…

    he burst out in laughter and shortly thereafter,
    perpetual hiccups ensued.

    • Buffy Silverman

      So sorry you were under the weather and didn’t get to send this in Tiffany. But thanks for sharing now!

      • http://www.itsrhymetime.com Tiffany Strelitz Haber

        Thanks! I figured, why not.

      • Elizabeth McBride

        Glad you are feeling better, Tiffany! It is a great poem! Thank you for letting us read it.

    • http://www.glosonblog.com Gloson

      Hahaha wow. I just learned what a didgeridoo is! Great poem, Tiffany. The end made me laugh! At least Addison got what he wanted (and at the same time didn’t want)–a world record for hiccupping. Sorry you were under the whether-to-post-the-poem-or-not. :(( Get some more rest! :)

      • http://www.itsrhymetime.com Tiffany Strelitz Haber

        ha! well, mainly, i slept through the deadline, and then second guessed the whole thing. but thanks!

    • Kathy Ellen Davis

      Great poem! As always, great rhythm and meter :) Glad we got to see it and happy you’re feeling better!

      • http://www.itsrhymetime.com Tiffany Strelitz Haber

        thanks!

    • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

      I really like this. So unexpected, well-crafted and fits within the 8 stanzas nicely.

      • http://www.itsrhymetime.com Tiffany Strelitz Haber

        thanks, so much!

        • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

          My pleasure!

  • http://www.mainelywrite.blogspot.com Donna Smith

    Can you tell that I’m babysitting a toddler this week (2 weeks actually)?

    Perpetual Motion

    Per-pet-u-al – Per-pet-u-al
    the motion never stops,
    Perpetual / Perpetual /
    full speed with jumps and hops!
    PERPETUAL, PERPETUAL!
    with rappy, tappy, tap!
    perpetual… perpetual…
    When will he take a nap?

    • Quinette Cook

      It’s nice to see visual play of the word.

    • deborahhwilliams

      HA! Love this, Donna–feels like a day at the toddler center where I’ve been subbing!

    • Damon Dean

      Been there, done that done that done that done that done that done that done that done that…

  • Allan Wolf

    The Thankful Judge

    This pressure to judge is perpetual.

    I find the task too intellectual.

    So thanks to Ms. Haber

    who did me a favor

    and rendered my score ineffectual.

  • http://teacherdance.blogspot.com Linda Baie

    What a surprise at the end, Kathy! Fun!

  • http://www.thinkkidthink.com/ Ed DeCaria

    Lemons … meet lemonade.

    This is fun!

    Thanks, everyone.

  • http://jahangiri.us/2013/ Holly Jahangiri

    10 – Perpetual
    Daydreams of a Writer

    Thoughts travel round, perpetual,
    Inside the writer’s head.
    In dreams, she’s chased by villanelles –
    And so leaps out of bed!
    In English class she’s well aware
    She ought to write a theme,
    But haiku thoughts are shattered
    When the bell disrupts her dream.

  • Rebekah Hoeft

    Whiner

    My brother is a winner
    At chucking all his dinner
    (You’d think that he’d be thinner)
    Against the kitchen wall.

    Perpetual at whining
    But not so fond of dining
    For quiet we are pining
    Instead: a constant squall.

  • Josh

    Depending on the things I’ve said, in spite of what I know.
    Situated right between a stop, a yield, a go.
    I find myself a milquetoast with nothing left to boast,
    Stuck being a killjoy from coast to coast to coast.

    Fixed in the epitome of perpetual confusion,
    My life is nothing but inconsequential-like illusion.
    A dilettante with dearth, emaciated with delusion,
    Like a salvo left a dent, a most perpetual contusion.

    It’s possible and logical; I might be diabolical
    Which means that I might chronicle
    Concurrent psychological decision
    That is blurted in derision
    Than is slurred and blurred of vision
    As it makes a thin incision
    just a snippet, nothing snappy,
    Nothing that will make me sappy,
    As I lie alone, I’m happy
    To relax and take a nappy.

    As I’m worn out from this shindig, an appendage to festivity
    This drudgery has bludgeoned me and seeped my creativity.
    I’m just an auxiliary, very scary tributary
    Flowing into hail-mary moments
    That will make or break me

    And if I’m not mistaken I’ll be shaken when I waken
    I’ll begin to cause a ruckus, I’m aplomb now, I will rock it,
    I consort the crystal ball and all success is in my pocket.
    As I rocket through whatever juts and cuts me through,
    I sock it to all gripe and type of ballyhoo
    I’m rejuvenated, recreated, tried and true
    held to protean spoken world view.
    I’m joyful to do just what I was born to do.
    A rabid, avid writer who… Whew.

    Well, it does contain “perpetual”

    J. J.

    • Quinette Cook

      Yes, it does contain “perpetual” and maybe just a few other words. Now go rest.

    • http://www.mainelywrite.blogspot.com Donna Smith

      Ok. You win.
      Amazing!

    • Samuel Kent

      I’d love to hear you rap this, J.J.

      • Josh

        Yeah, I might have to do that. I’m contemplating continuing it with the rest of the words from the tournament – maybe rap it at the end! Could get pretty long though… And I’m not entirely sure it makes complete sense as is, lol.

  • Damon Dean

    Love it Kathy! Great short snippy pace and a surprise reveal.

  • Diane Adams

    Perpetual
    It is a perpetual mystery to me
    How poetry can be
    Such a boon to me

    I love it’s rhymes
    I love the times
    it soothes my soul for less than dimes

    Poetry perpetually provides.

  • http://motherstreusel.com/ Mother Streusel

    Congratulations Kathy Ellen! I won’t lie, I feel pretty nervous about the next round.

  • Elizabeth McBride

    What a great poem, Kathy! Love the way it travels down the page – like a ponytail…